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If I close my eyes real tight…

19 Jul

Thank you writersisland.wordpress.com for the inspiration.

If I close my eyes real tight
I’ll see you once again
Faint smells in crowded rooms
Only finding where you’ve been

Sometimes I sense you staring
I turn quickly to find your face
But when I focus on you
Someones standing in your place

Maybe when I stop searching
You’ll find me here instead
You’ll miss that I stopped looking
You’ll miss me in your head

Maybe when that happens
We’ll once again unite
Spending days missing you
Wanting something new to write.

-BC

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5 Comments

Posted by on July 19, 2010 in Uncategorized

 

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5 responses to “If I close my eyes real tight…

  1. 1sojournal

    July 19, 2010 at 5:09 pm

    Really like your poem, especially these lines:

    Faint smells in crowded rooms
    Only finding where you’ve been

    Also like the hope and soft vulnerability in that second to last verse.

    Elizabeth

     
  2. slpmartin

    July 19, 2010 at 6:42 pm

    I really like those two lines very much also…it adds almost an air of mystery to the event…..also found the last line to be quite emotion packed.

     
  3. wayne

    July 20, 2010 at 3:33 am

    nicely done….thanks for sharing your words

     
  4. b_y

    July 20, 2010 at 12:44 pm

    I do like this. The rhyme makes it seem even more fragile. (I suspect that the same sentiment in my style would sound like stalking)

    (My response isn’t on my usual Briarcat blog)
    Riverside Community Reunion 2010

     
  5. RiikaInfinityy

    July 21, 2010 at 3:16 pm

    😀 interesting ! I love it, thank for sharing such a touching poem 🙂 looking forward for more^^

     

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